The Lovers:
A Poem From The Darkened Tales Collection
The room was filled with summers heat
and heavy scents of stifled air
I lay upon a burning pyre
and gently brushed your raven hair
I watched you hide behind a mask
that fuelled the urge of lover’s dare
I cupped your face between my palms
our pupils spoke in whispered stares
And as you slipped from off my bed
I hoped the Lord would grant my prayer
I watched you softly paint your lips
Then strike and fill me with despair
You scoured my eyes with fists of sand
and grabbed my face and pulled it tight
you ripped into my pulsing vein
then fled into the darkened night...
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42 comments:
Well done, my friend! I particularly enjoy poems and short stories with similar themes. Thanks for writing another!
Oh, longing!
wow. that was amazingly sensual...up until the sand int he eyes and throat ripping...lol. beautifully rendered pete...i am scared to go home now...smiles.
Boy that was steamy - poor guy didn't know what hit him!!!
Nicely done - I told you so!
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Full of dark passion. Excellent.
"our puples spoke in whispered stares" - that was so powerful an image.
So much passion simmering...such great chemistry going on and then oh boy! Chills over here!
wow,true poem from a lover. the imagery was strikingly beautiful.
A very powerful and moving poem. It speaks of sensuality and frustration and was beautifully crafted.
Love em and leave em. I felt my heart being ripped from my chest. Excellent.
Beautiful poetry Pete, loved reading this lovers' poem and wanted to also thank you for following me on twitter my ID is @larvK and the poets one-stop corner is such a great idea. Let me know what i need to submit a poem there~
impressive, and i can understand why this is part of your darkened tales collection...it's amazing how quickly love can change!! very nice, peter!!
Indeed, love can be a fickle, dangerous and yet seductive thing. Bravo on this poem, Pete. :)
I adore the imagery in that first stanza. Gorgeous!
I could feel the burn from love in this, Pete...emotional scars are quite an annoying one...we could only hope they are not on places we see them often and remember the pains...I also have a vivid image of that darkness where they disappear into after the deed has been done...I enjoyed this...Nice one, cheers!
I could feel the burn from love in this, Pete...emotional scars are quite an annoying one...we could only hope they are not on places we see them often and remember the pains...I also have a vivid image of that darkness where they disappear into after the deed has been done...I enjoyed this...Nice one, cheers!
I could feel the burn from love in this, Pete...emotional scars are quite an annoying one...we could only hope they are not on places we see them often and remember the pains...I also have a vivid image of that darkness where they disappear into after the deed has been done...I enjoyed this...Nice one, cheers!
No fangs do I wait stuck in me
No sand in my eyes
No face pulled tight
No throat ripped out
No screaming in the night
No stake drove into my heart
no burning torch of fire
No coffin full of dirty hay
No cross between my eyes
And not my soul in Hell to stay
Oh, the verse well done... Pete, you are a master at this type of writing...
Me, well I am afraid of my own shadow - I would not let that woman near me...
great read...bkm
Wow, Pete. I really felt sorry for the man. He must have had such a shock. You really are a talented poet.
Christine
Sensual and nice :)
i loved reading it in my mind .. kind of humming a song ... that makes me wonder what if some one really sang this 1 what a great song it would make !!
hot and steamy
until
the sensuality in this poem is way beyond beautiful Pete! reread it many times already! cheers my friend..very well written :)
OH, the charm of the undead...:) She charmed him until she got him where she wanted him. Hmmm...not unlike the living either I guess. Great poem!
I'm not familiar with your Darkened Tales or perhaps that last bit wouldn't have grabbed me so. Not your typical tale of getting dumped after lovemaking! I love it!
Ouch, the eyes, they bleed!! Nice one, Mr. Marshall! Sorry I couldn't contribute anything today; out of brain-juice lately. Shall use a bendy straw to suck some out from a zombie's head.
That one is pretty intense...there are spiders that eat their lover after the act..
when people leave, they don't just go:
They take space with them and create a vacuum that sucks you in.
now to find those bandages...
"our pupils spoke in whispered stares" that's the most romantic line I've read in awhile! The ending now that had to hurt! Great writing!
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Cheers!
Wow, hot passion and cold indifference! The dangers of a one-night stand? Well done.
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Pete:
C'est la vie, pleasure and pain are companions, when one is awake the other is asleep in your bed.
Loved the power and intensity of this darkened tale.
Joanny
I appreciate your use of rhythm and sound. Intense images and a surprising end. Powerful use of language. - Bill
Without a doubt: a dark, dark tale. Well crafted.
First, sensuous. Then, passionate. And then, dark and eerie!
Me llllikes!!! :)
A story well-put!
I hope the guy's eyes are alright though... what with all that sand ;-)
But I bet she'll find him irresistible, and will be back again..
Have a great week!
thank you for all your wonderful comments which i have thoroughly enjoyed reading....the pain of a one night stand and the gambles we take..spot on!!! cheers Pete
rich with imagery and longing.
i enjoyed this very much.
smiles,
So beautiful and then the swift and powerful turn,
'You scoured my eyes with fists of sand', great.
Turning on the light...
No, I shall turn it off.
And use my flashlight.
And re-read this.
OOOO!
Ok Light back on!
Golly!
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:)
Nicely written :D and i like the way you portrayed out the scenes ;D thank for sharing!^^
devilishly creepy! a great write!
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