Removed
by pete marshall
From deep inside she felt the heat
of scars that stained her swollen flesh
that burned upon her ravaged throat
upon a mattress soaked in sweat
An ashen face that looked beyond
the pale of hope and lost respect
a fetid breath that spoke of death
that uttered words yet felt regret
Sleep would fall upon her face
as eyes would flicker gently tight
a kiss that sealed a warm embrace
that kept her safe throughout the night
And moments pass despite the hour
as coughs awake her silken dreams
that flow with grace & dampen fires
that quell her fear & stem the screams.
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My 7 year old daughter has had problems all her life with her tonsils, having been hospitalized for a week in August with a severe infection. Today they were finally removed. She is fine & doing well.
Today I also link this poem up with a wonderful community of poets, D'verse
Today I also link this poem up with a wonderful community of poets, D'verse
16 comments:
Glad to hear the offending 'tonsils' have been removed, and that you daughter is making progress
i am glad to hear all went well pete...wish her continued recovery and nice chatting with you today as well...
pete marshall...it is a beautiful thing to see you walk through the doors at dverse...smiles.
felt the parental tension... worry... in a piece that almost sang... better health to her future... she has a lovely dad.
Hey Pete - picking up the thread - i hope all is well.
the poem is mighty fine and communicates then this line
quell her fear & stem the screams.
a kicker and a half
all the best
Glad to hear your daughter is doing ok. The poem dramatizes both feeling ill and being scared of surgery, as well as the need for a parent's reassuring presence.
I am happy to see she is well and recovering.
Nice to see you here~
You can let the little lady know she's got a pub filled with poets rooting for her! YAY! Pete, honestly...the last thing I expected as inspiration for this write. Before reading your note I took it to be a WHOLE lot darker! Fantastic! And I know I've said it before, but you are an absolute master of rhyme and rhythm...I humbly bow to you Poet
Ha. went through the same thing with my daughter ...so glad she is doing well and will be healthy.
much enjoyed the poem...(as a parent it is quite difficult to watch our young suffer.)
lynne
beautiful..very well written and to the point..easy to comprehend yet depth to your words..
Dear Pete
Good to hear that all is well... may you enjoy the peace...
I enjoyed the verse...
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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I am glad that your daughter is doing well. Lovely poem!
Dude, you are awesome.
Yeah, Dude, awesome! So happy to see you here. My prayers for the little one. Hopefully this will stop the upper respiratory problems. So many better ways to cope with them now. Sending much love,my friend!
So good that the torturous things have been removed and so glad she is doing well! hope her sleep is a lot more peaceful now :) and what an awesome write that was!
I love reading your poems Pete ! The cadence you work through your writes allows such an easy read - I could feel the pain and love for your little lady throughout this piece :)
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