Sun, Sea & Sirens
by pete marshall
Her silken skin, a shoulder strap
slipped to show a hint of pink,
her thighs that sung a lilting tune
a sirens call where dreams would sink.
Too long I spent just looking past
hidden from a shaded view,
where waters lapped a flowing beat
of dreams that floated on the blue.
Tousled thoughts & ruffled hair
beyond the beach her longing stare
behind the cool, abrasive wall
the lust of man, the wanting fool.
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Today's One Shoot Sunday is a choice of 5 wonderful images by James Rainsford. I took option 5...
18 comments:
Damn. Strong beginning and finish, but that second stanza is incredible.
I hung on every word from start to finish...wow.
just gorgeous Pete ~ great image choice ~ but Oh I could just smack that taste of salt, sea and air ~ stunning imagery ~ Lib ~ @Libithina
I smell and hear the sea and your thoughts and evocation perfect. Outstanding write. Antonia Baranov
her thighs that sung a lilting tune
a sirens call where dreams would sink....whew...got a great beat as well pete...nicely done...
seductive and maybe dangerous...had to think of odysseus who let himself bind to a mast on the ship..so he could hear the sirens sing but couldn't give in to the want.. great take on the prompt pete
There's something almost classical about this, measured, formal, especially the end lines, that gives it a 19th century feel despite the definite 21st century subject. " a flowing beat of dreams that floated on the blue.." captures the whole mood of posed calm of the pic. Nice one.
Just so excellent, strong on form, musical on the ear, beauty before the eyes.
Poetry
I adore the second stanza.
provocative writing - your specialty is seems. great one, pete!
Wonderful write, Pete, especially the second stanza. I like the rhyme here too; it's a bit more subtle within the fine cadence of the lines.
I read everyone's comments and agree with them all. Your lyricism and classical references make this piece timeless. Beautiful, Pete. Gay
I agree with Hedgewitch. Nicely done, Pete.
a fabulous write...many applaud the second stanza, which is wonderful philosophically..but, I rather enjoy the last stanza for its brutal honesty ~
The first two stanzas are like a silky dream, but I love the grains and textures emerging in the final stanza!
"a sirens call where dreams would sink."
"dreams that floated on the blue."
"the lust of man, the wanting fool."
wonderful lines! the ever-sensuous siren... amazing take on the photograph.
That siren song, where many a man has found his demise I'm sure. Seductive, passionate and well written my friend
Damn. Strong beginning and finish, but that second stanza is incredible.
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