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Monday, 7 March 2011

My Heart Not Knows: by Pete Marshall


My Heart Not Knows
by Pete Marshall


My heart not knows where love will lie
Upon a cursed & ravaged bed
And storms will rage in darkened skies
My heart not knows where love will lie
No longer touched by waking eyes
A love is spurned as words are said
My heart not knows where love will lie
Upon a cursed & ravaged bed

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Its Triolet Day at One Stop Poetry, hosed by Shan Hendry. This is my attempt at tackling this form.


20 comments:

repressedsoul said...

This is a great Triolet Pete, written in tetrameter and the iambs are spot on. Didn't expect any less from you. Excellent choice of refrains too. Thanks for having a pop!

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

This was quite good.
A wickedly stormy triolet
and the refrains just ache.
Well done.

Glynn said...

This is lovely, Pete.

bumfuzzled said...

lol nice work, pete. and I noticed, too, you used the term, "attempt" like I. :) I think your attempt's better :)

Monty / bum

hpicasso said...

yet we reach through the thorns...
the method and the message work for me

Peace, hp

Gloria said...

Great job with the form, and I really like it!!!

dustus said...

Haunting repetition in your Troilet. I like it.

Iwrite4u said...

A poetry worth to be read.Nice

Kerry O'Connor said...

A wonderfully evocative piece. The repetitious lines are haunting.

signed...bkm said...

Another great piece on the depths of love and its questions....very well do and thoughtout Peter...loved it...bkm

Hope said...

my heart was stilled as I held my breath. Your words froze time.

beautifully done
thank you

JL Dodge said...

Beautifully done !!

Anthony Desmond said...

dark, & very capturing poem. well done pete!

Mama Zen said...

The second refrain is just gorgeous!

Penny said...

Excellent Pete.

Julie Jordan Scott said...

I know a bed like that one... very evocative triolet.

Thank you.

My triolet

Shewriting said...

I love your triolet, pete. The words just roll off my tongue...your poetry is so fluid, even within the constraint of a specific form. Hope you are well.

wordsasunder said...

Very well written. :)

Celestial Dreamz said...

loved reading it. all the best.

anthonynorth said...

Deep and questioning. Great write.