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Tuesday, 29 March 2011

The Carvery: by Pete Marshall


The Carvery
by pete marshall

Pride & dreams were laid upon
a smorgasbord of shattered souls,
yet dude was smooth and played his tune
as time would pass and pay its toll.
Hope was breathed as clocks would tick
whilst stifled air would fill the room,
faces strained in summers heat
to force a smile beyond the gloom.
Silence fell on nervous smirks
who doubted all their wasted years
that lived a life beyond respect
whilst hiding from financial fear.
Cards were played upon a desk
as jokers tried to pass the time
looks were glanced with eyes ahead,
the scythe was splayed across the line
and all were left with mouths aghast
as blood would flow across the floor,
The Carver claimed these wasting souls
then licked his lips, their life no more.

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This is my poem for the award winning One Stop Poetry and their weekly poetry fest, One Shot Wednesday.

Last night One stop Poetry were the proud recipients of winning a Shorty award in the categorary Art. Well done to everyone who helped make this possible...thankyou

27 comments:

Joe Hesch said...

Very cool, Pete. Ask not for whom the bell tolls. And don't try to keep it from tolling. When it's your time, it's your time. Terrific. And congratulations to you and the rest of the team on your Shorty Award.
Cheers, mate!

Chris G. said...

Another great one for the weekly poetry feast, Pete - quite a full course. It's an honor and a privilege to share a corner of the blogosphere with you, my friend; cheers for all your hard work that's helped get One Stop where it is today!

Hopefully the Shortys mean big things in the future for us all!

Beachanny said...

Well layered metaphor as scythes will cut in many ways and blood can leak from many wounds..real and figurative.

I second what Chris said, much thanks for your hard work here at onestoppoetry. Your vision and dedication may help open doors closed to poets and poetry for so long. Whether in the US or abroad, our writers are of the people, by the people and for the people and deserve to be read and to be known!

Anthony Desmond said...

beautiful art pete.. amazingly written, deep, layer upon layer of awesomeness!

David Allen Waters said...

this is thought provoking...deep and well done;)

Carys said...

Wow Pete, you really hit the ball out of the park with this one. Very powerful metaphor, tight as a drum, effortless flow too and building to a hell of a finish. Nice One Shot my friend.

okoatokewa - the poet said...

This is another great poem from the guru himself, nice flow of words, i love it.

James Rainsford said...

Profound and intensely moving.
The form and feeling here are in perfect synchronicity. I love it!
Thank you, James.

marousia said...

Oh, I just loved the symbolism in this poem

Natasha said...

Let's be honest, judging from the pic, I dare say some were willing victims...love the finish. Again, so impressed by how effortless you make the rhyme seem. Perfectly tuned and fitted. Another wonderful visit here this evening thanks to Oneshotwednesday, and much thanks to you, dear founding father, and your mates for providing us this forum. A standing ovation delivered from this Maritime shore.

flaubert said...

Well-penned poem and congrats on the award, Pete. You folks have a great site.

Pamela

lori said...

Wow, this is a little bit of amazing. Every line, every word is full and necessary. That last line is awesome. Congrats on the award!

Brian Miller said...

wow dude vivid and intense...love the begining where you lay it all out on the table...says much...

so wish you could have been there dude!

kkrige said...

Congrats on your awesome award and thank you for all the hard work you guys do Pete.

signed...bkm said...

Oh my what a tight write Pete...all laid on the table...filled with metaphor, a natural art of yours....congrat's and well deserved...bkm

Olivia said...

Dark and intense!
Mind blowing imagery.. vividly expressed!

Pete, hearty Congratulations, very well deserved!!

Hugs xox

Jerry said...

congrats on the Shorty Award. This piece marked time and named it as it is...a constant ticking whether we notice it or not.

ladynimue said...

Another wonderful read from you !!
:)

Congrats for the award ! Well deserved :D

repressedsoul said...

Huge congrats on the shorty award Pete, and as I keep saying, good things come...well waiting in hope ;) deep multilayered write here Pete, don't go waiting for the end, it comes soon enough. You're only really ever beginning x

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

I'm sure you played a big part in earning the Shorty Award, Pete!

Corbie said...

Wow, a very catchy poem. I loved the flow,an easy read. I also enjoyed the message portrayed in the poem. Thank you for sharing.

heartspell said...

Boy, remind me to stay away from that guy! I'll stick with hope...
Congratulations on the Shorty Award! One Stop Poetry is awesome!

ACEBiggaveli said...

OVE THE POEM

liv2write2day said...

So happy for you and your "team" about the award. So well deserved. Thanks for bringing this to us.

As always, your poetry is outstanding.

mairmusic said...

Congrats on the Shorty-- well deserved by you all! Dark take on education here? The intensity of your words bode doom.

Bradley Howington said...

Lovely poem, Pete! Well written! You write so beautifully, my friend. I am so proud that One Stop Poetry won a Shorty Award. I voted! Great write! :)

william said...

no one deserves it more :)