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Sunday 2 January 2011

My Coney Island Baby


My Coney Island Baby

Hedonistic summer dreams 
within this sandscape world
Crazy Feeling's rising high
and tricks with Charley's Girl

Parasols that hide our shame
for She’s My Best Friend’s pearl
sequinned lace, her painted face
and Kicks that made us whirl

His Gift was she or maybe me
Oooohhh Baby take this pain
in summers heat where lovers meet
they play their heady games

Nobodys Business on this beach
androgynous dreams were maybe
A fluttered fan, a soft held hand
my Coney Island Baby…….

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The wonderful image is taken by Danielle Kelly and simply titled "Coney Island". It is featured today on One Shoot Sunday, part of One Stop Poetry, and forms their picture prompt. Check out the amazing interview with Danielle Kelly whilst you are there too.

24 comments:

dustus said...

It's not a party unless Pete Marshall shows up! lol Your poem reminds me of a nostalgic seaside tune. Excellent flow and very witty. Happy New Year!

Christine Ramsay said...

You have created some wonderful and slightly naughty images with this poem, Peter. I love it.

Christine

Larry said...

ahhh....can walk in your poem and smell the ocean and hot dogs. :)

Jerry said...

I wonder what the music would be to these wonderful words. Read like a song...Thanks Pete.

Gigi Ann said...

Oh, I loved your witty little poem. I even had to get out my dictionary, and had a chuckle with the word, 'androgynous'.

joanna said...

Beautifully penned,,, got my attention, I haven't been to Coney Island in years, nostalgic perhaps more so that many can relate to their own 'Coney Island' paradise in this wonderful lyrical poem.
Happy New Year!

joanny

Carmela-J said...

This is really evocative writing. Made me smile - thank you for sharing!

Unknown said...

This is awesome!

hedgewitch said...

pete, have you ever heard the Kinks' Muswell Hillbilly album? It's a collection of bizarre story songs, everything from an ode to tea drinking, a ballad about Holloway Jail, a song about the surrey with the fringe on top sung by a london char--for some reason this poem reminds me of that collection's eclectic and riotous sense of fun, laced with just a bit of the dark.

Myrna R. said...

You bring back memories of strolling on the boardwalk, then going to the rides and getting on the roller coaster. Then the long subway ride back to the Bronx. Coney Island - my childhood playground.

Beachanny said...

Coney Island with a dash of Brighton thrown in and hints (just little flashes) of Fire Island. Wicked and winsome, your talents are boundless. I love everything you write Pete. You know that. Thanks. Gay

Fireblossom said...

Does Lou Reed know about this? ;-)

Chris G. said...

I've got to agree with Dustus here...quite song-like. In fact, I can't visualize it without also putting a tune to it. Flirtatious and playful, with good rhyme and flow. Fun way to kick off the new year!

Anonymous said...

You are such a voracious flirt, and this is why I love you! Nice rhymes, flow, and a playful wink at the end of the last stanza, nicely done Pete x

Jenne' R. Andrews said...

terrific, start to finish. xxJenne'

Maureen said...

Musical, and fun, and well-written. I especially like how you concluded the poem.

signed...bkm said...

love your rhyme - you are a master at it, reads like a song this Coney Island Baby...bkm

Alegria Imperial said...

I agree with Adam on the "excellent flow and wit" of your poem, Pete! I love the references to songs, too, and ditties perhaps, and the rhyme that never fails. Thanks!

Marshy said...

ok...i fess up..LOL...so many of you felt this reminded them of a song..and felt the music tune...being english...Coney Island means only one thing to me..Lou Reed..when i saw the photo..of the "lady" at coney island beach i had to pay homage to Lou himself...

Coney Island Baby is an album he released in 1975...the track on this album are;

"Crazy Feeling"
"Charley's Girl"
"She's My Best Friend"
"Kicks"
"A Gift"
"Ooohhh Baby"
"Nobody's Business"
"Coney Island Baby"

all titles are in the verse in running order...i just built the rest of the poem around it...so there you go..my secrets out..but what a wonderful picture..cheers pete

Hope said...

I agree with Jerry, reads like a song.

awesome, imagery and rhythm!

Glynn said...

Excellent, Pete. You blend a kind of shame (or embarrassment) with an in-your-face attitude. Like Coney Island.

Dulçe ♥ said...

Amazing what a picture inspires the different writers, poets... yours is so subtle and sweet, almost sensual as you see that lady in a beach dream
You are great
Thanks for commenting

:)

Ramesh Sood said...

Liked your poem Pete.. thanks for your wish and visit on my page..God bless..

eyeography said...

I feel like I am on the beach right now..
Nice work :)