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Sunday, 1 August 2010

The River Runs Wild...(A Tale In 160 Characters)


The River Runs Wild...
(A Tale In 160 Characters) 
By Pete Marshall

The current flowed beyond the rocks
Where fish would dart and children stopped
And mothers would grieve on Parson's Lawn
As waters still flowed from dusk till dawn

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24 comments:

Brian Miller said...

and the river rolls on...nice 160 pete...

Brian Miller said...

welcome back!

Caty said...

Your few words sure made the river feel wild. Nicely done :)

PattiKen said...

Pete, this is beautiful and so poignant. I really like it. And welcome back!

Harris Channing said...

Pretty! I like it and am ready to see it for myself! Good one!

gospelwriter said...

So much packed into your 160c. Well done!

gospelwriter said...

So much packed into your 160c. Well done!

Alice Audrey said...

This is so poetic. Such nice rhythm.

Monkey Man said...

Welcome back, Pete. Great 160. I would have seen the image through your words alone.

Christine said...

Another masterpiece like all of your poetry. I just love your work.

Christine

Claudia said...

can feel the flow in your words - and hear the river song..

joanny said...

Pete

that was some beautiful writing there my blog friend you raised the bar on 160. Glad you back in the swing of the community again.

Joanny

Tony Single said...

Good to have you back, Pete! :)

Let the waters roll on...

william said...

very nice pete, well written :)

Wild Rose said...

Welcome back Pete...loved the flow of the current from dusk till dawn~

Felicitas said...

A beautiful and haunting rhyme! Loved it!

TALON said...

The juxtapositon of the life around and in the water and the mothers grieving...you pack a lot in 160 characters!

Lovely to have you back, Pete.

Kavita said...

A beautiful analogy.. Life too goes on..
Things come our way, they go.. but we march on, with the eternal hope of finding our dawn as well..
A beautifully out verse here, Pete..
Thanks for this lovely 160!

Mama Zen said...

Gorgeous!

Pete Marshall said...

spent a lot of time over the last week amongst the rivers & sea..needless to say the danger is always there..thanks for reading guys..Pete

Jingle said...

welcome back...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/08/02/the-celebrate-blogger-awards-plus-prayers-4-viola/

you have a runner up on short stories award in my wordpress.com...

Happy Monday!

Jingle said...

beautiful 160.

Me said...

Rivers stop for no one. Nice 160, musical...like the water's song.
-C

JamieDedes said...

Quite lovely 160.