tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post8908164843998405535..comments2023-07-09T15:24:09.491+01:00Comments on Pete Marshall: The PulseMarshyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-42840810337892787292011-01-27T13:51:08.991+00:002011-01-27T13:51:08.991+00:00wonderful vivid imagery of passion and lovewonderful vivid imagery of passion and loveAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-87412110987999535372011-01-26T20:28:23.419+00:002011-01-26T20:28:23.419+00:00ok Pete I really really really like this one. HOW...ok Pete I really really really like this one. HOWEVER, i feel like you're denying us from a truth at the end. ?? <br />amy joAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-33161963210854149762011-01-26T06:27:11.315+00:002011-01-26T06:27:11.315+00:00"I count the beat within my head
you whisper ..."I count the beat within my head<br />you whisper words so soft and true<br />I feel the heat that warms our bed"..<br /><br />So lovely...<br />I love villanelle's... :)eyeographyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05508519847517495863noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-24888238941209439632011-01-22T03:29:05.029+00:002011-01-22T03:29:05.029+00:00The villanelle is one of my favorite forms, and th...The villanelle is one of my favorite forms, and this was fantastic!Catyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13203872150946002183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-28622167847451380532011-01-20T15:34:54.982+00:002011-01-20T15:34:54.982+00:00Yet again, this is a poem of yours that I will rea...Yet again, this is a poem of yours that I will read over and over. The progression of love to such a dark end and the sensual nature of it are powerful. The alternate use of the beat/heat lines is very effective. The words you choose are striking:<br /><br />"As love lays blind and hope lays dead" <br /><br />being just one example. They'd make great song lyrics, too.<br /><br />No one would have realized that this was your first "attempt" at this form, Pete, if you hadn't told us. You appear to have mastered it in one try.<br /><br />LOVE this! daniAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-11388254235561740882011-01-18T18:15:55.275+00:002011-01-18T18:15:55.275+00:00Success at last. I thought I would never get the p...Success at last. I thought I would never get the poem up. I like the new style. It works really well. A very passiontae piece.Christine Ramsayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02633275896708261299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-77315641283700861892011-01-18T05:36:25.293+00:002011-01-18T05:36:25.293+00:00oh.... I think you've got 'it'... phew...oh.... I think you've got 'it'... phew!Kayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17353317664100788614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-87229126728232545492011-01-18T00:43:42.069+00:002011-01-18T00:43:42.069+00:00that was hot...mewing...you are doing something ri...that was hot...mewing...you are doing something right...snortBrian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-70194903832077182612011-01-18T00:08:35.388+00:002011-01-18T00:08:35.388+00:00You conquered the form in one! Iambic tetrameter i...You conquered the form in one! Iambic tetrameter is the lyricist in you. I've read you in other metered feet but this rhythm and meter length is your own true voice. Beautifully written and no stretch, as always to make the rhyme seem natural and unforced. Wonderful.<br />GayBeachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-22138187147142485212011-01-17T23:11:01.314+00:002011-01-17T23:11:01.314+00:00Yay, you wrote one Pete! Passion on the page unti...Yay, you wrote one Pete! Passion on the page until half way through and then that 'wanton screw' really switched the mood of the piece. Hell of a twist that blood warms the bed instead of love. Hat's off to you matey, great first villanelle.<br /><br />CarysAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-47718048079482606602011-01-17T19:33:56.835+00:002011-01-17T19:33:56.835+00:00oh my goodness pete - now this was HOT..!! cough -...oh my goodness pete - now this was HOT..!! cough - forgot to look at the form... no seriously - if i'm not terribly wrong you have written this in perfect iambic tetrameter..kudos..perfect use of form and all the emotions...wow..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-75577945871876763792011-01-17T19:01:51.786+00:002011-01-17T19:01:51.786+00:00Most excellent...you rocked that villanelle! It is...Most excellent...you rocked that villanelle! It is a fun form...I'm still hung up on my sestina.SuziCatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04025931724313344438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-77412836776075296802011-01-17T18:46:43.812+00:002011-01-17T18:46:43.812+00:00That was your 1st attempt? No, come on. Really? Wo...That was your 1st attempt? No, come on. Really? Wow! Very well done.dustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-55074190517538576782011-01-17T17:52:21.423+00:002011-01-17T17:52:21.423+00:00love,passion, longing, and a bit of darkness I enj...love,passion, longing, and a bit of darkness I enjoyed your poem.pattyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06042196899105312611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-49753690149772994782011-01-17T17:48:46.139+00:002011-01-17T17:48:46.139+00:00You are the king of rhyme...I bow before you lol. ...You are the king of rhyme...I bow before you lol. Pete this is amazing...I'm going to rewriteAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-35007408587469875302011-01-17T17:39:39.372+00:002011-01-17T17:39:39.372+00:00Darkly sensual. I verymuch enjoyed this one.Darkly sensual. I verymuch enjoyed this one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-62699497933968922982011-01-17T17:32:50.937+00:002011-01-17T17:32:50.937+00:00Nice 1st attempt, read like you've been doing ...Nice 1st attempt, read like you've been doing them a while.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-25632083035874297012011-01-17T17:30:55.611+00:002011-01-17T17:30:55.611+00:00Nice villanelle, pete, avoiding the monotony of th...Nice villanelle, pete, avoiding the monotony of the repetition by the movement in the narrative and pace. Liked it very much.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-14309211638204313742011-01-17T17:23:20.432+00:002011-01-17T17:23:20.432+00:00Great poem, Pete - full of life and passion and lo...Great poem, Pete - full of life and passion and love.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.com