tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post6644430897965682697..comments2023-07-09T15:24:09.491+01:00Comments on Pete Marshall: Fallen DreamsMarshyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comBlogger38125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-9706584403854051952010-12-18T05:19:41.006+00:002010-12-18T05:19:41.006+00:00heartfelt and deep.
Appreciate this one very much...heartfelt and deep. <br />Appreciate this one very much!<br />love the flow and rhythm.<br />Excellent!<br /><br />thank youHopehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07423174840229628807noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-24004893185987316062010-12-16T18:08:12.639+00:002010-12-16T18:08:12.639+00:00You convey the mood so well...a common atmosphere ...You convey the mood so well...a common atmosphere that seems to descend with winter gloom. I find your writing to be classical, elegant.<br /><br />My One Shot: http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/12/13/on-reading-a-poem-for-poetry-potluck-and-monday-morning-writing-prompt/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-46814893245141090612010-12-16T10:48:54.728+00:002010-12-16T10:48:54.728+00:00very well captured emotions...
"A walk was s...very well captured emotions...<br /><br />"A walk was sought through moonlit streets<br />That felt the cold of winters chill<br />Alone you paced the cobbled paths<br />And touched the pain that keeps you still"<br /><br />These are my fav lines... :)eyeographyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05508519847517495863noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-44465081002609643202010-12-16T00:11:49.105+00:002010-12-16T00:11:49.105+00:00You know I love your work! Don't you dare slid...You know I love your work! Don't you dare slide off into despair. Dum Spiro Spero! ...Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-73223037357656256612010-12-15T21:37:42.390+00:002010-12-15T21:37:42.390+00:00Your sense of lyrical flow cannot be taught. You&#...Your sense of lyrical flow cannot be taught. You've something special, mate. Chin up. Bad time of year for melancholy poets.dustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-67174958802304294102010-12-15T19:31:00.682+00:002010-12-15T19:31:00.682+00:00Dreams will die when trust has gone... So true Pet...Dreams will die when trust has gone... So true Pete. loved this oneKodjo Deynoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01299996598769756878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-70103508325599204552010-12-15T18:39:30.829+00:002010-12-15T18:39:30.829+00:00Oh our fallen dreams....sitting alone..at times we...Oh our fallen dreams....sitting alone..at times we all our there in that space..to stay above it, renew it a life long journey...it is what keeps us alive...always a read read here Peter...bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-86427968048292534912010-12-15T18:28:25.486+00:002010-12-15T18:28:25.486+00:00Great flow and mood. I say use all your moods as a...Great flow and mood. I say use all your moods as a writer--pen them all! My poems this week are rather serious too. What say over the holidays we make each other laugh again?<br />Thanks for One Shot. <br />HeatherHeather Grace Stewarthttp://heathergracestewart.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-81514162983798314152010-12-15T18:14:51.120+00:002010-12-15T18:14:51.120+00:00Really, I'm so much in awe of your sense of rh...Really, I'm so much in awe of your sense of rhyme and meter, Pete! And in this poem of pain and foreboding, the honesty of your lines and the purity of feeling have taken on such shape it nonetheless finishes with an uplifted sigh. Thanks, Pete, for taking us in and out of so familiar a state!Alegria Imperialnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-51101989510588041972010-12-15T17:21:08.842+00:002010-12-15T17:21:08.842+00:00touching the pain - pete this comes so honest, flo...touching the pain - pete this comes so honest, flowingly and heartfelt - i think it's one of my favorites of you - and it meets me at a place i know well when the castle walls tumble down...and you wonder what is left..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-27628246607193765922010-12-15T17:20:56.980+00:002010-12-15T17:20:56.980+00:00I feel you Pete.been there.Hold on buddy, Tomorrow...I feel you Pete.been there.Hold on buddy, Tomorrow is just a day away..:)<br />YOUR TALENT IS FLOURISHING WITH EVERY POEM Pete..OUTSTANDING..:)Desert Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17370899545012572162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-22420904090805729332010-12-15T15:57:30.513+00:002010-12-15T15:57:30.513+00:00Sounds like you've fallen into the winter dold...Sounds like you've fallen into the winter doldrums, Pete. (Get some sun!) Nice One Shot, though sorrowful.Bubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-30992370248756776652010-12-15T15:38:23.790+00:002010-12-15T15:38:23.790+00:00Your melancholia produces really good poetry. You...Your melancholia produces really good poetry. You reveal your open heart here.Myrna R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15088915165678737118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-89996615790292755762010-12-15T15:12:50.006+00:002010-12-15T15:12:50.006+00:00a pictorial piece, deep felt emotions here... nice...a pictorial piece, deep felt emotions here... niceJhpoetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02745726173641549524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-42304734898029539322010-12-15T13:34:41.775+00:002010-12-15T13:34:41.775+00:00sad tale... especially appreciate your structure/m...sad tale... especially appreciate your structure/meter, which is nicely consistent in iambic tetrameter. Do you realise the difficulty I have trying to explain iambic meter and how to feel it/write it to decent free verse poets? You say you're self-taught - then you must have a natural gift. Iambic meter allows the lines to roll along very smoothly, as I'm sure you can feel as you write them. It's closest to how we speak, so not just an arbitrary convention. Your rhymes feel natural and unforced also. You could write something like a sonnet or villanelle no problem.<br /><br />Nice stuff man<br /><br />LukeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-59281602849418888932010-12-15T13:21:18.125+00:002010-12-15T13:21:18.125+00:00Gotta say I liked it, if only because it matched m...Gotta say I liked it, if only because it matched my mood and you have a fantastic skill toward description. Melancholia is hard to strike the right note with but I think you did a wonderful job. Very much enjoyed the read even with the darker subject matter/theme.<br /><br />crb.Caribbean Foolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16211032750843178534noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-38774696901783808942010-12-15T12:16:51.172+00:002010-12-15T12:16:51.172+00:00Melancholy isn't the worst place from which to...Melancholy isn't the worst place from which to jump into writing. <br />thanks for sharing.Jerryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04874006676004790578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-29266478339671113762010-12-15T10:54:40.298+00:002010-12-15T10:54:40.298+00:00isnt it always teh hightlight of fallen dreams...w...isnt it always teh hightlight of fallen dreams...waking up to it and sitting alone?DeLihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15795530327579458125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-62250916501892037822010-12-15T10:10:25.480+00:002010-12-15T10:10:25.480+00:00Wonderful profound and heartfelt poem.
Anita.Wonderful profound and heartfelt poem.<br /><br />Anita.Anita Magdalenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17759774477028333590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-48005232364867475272010-12-15T08:13:38.971+00:002010-12-15T08:13:38.971+00:00I rate your poems OUTSTANDING!! Be they sad or joy...I rate your poems OUTSTANDING!! Be they sad or joyous, I always read them out aloud... cuz they are so rhythmic and well paced! <br />Your words here took me to a ramshackle castle, with its walls caving in on me, and with no one to turn to... Emotions oozes out of your poem, my friend.. it's simply beautiful (albeit sad)<br /><br />I hope your melancholia has abated by now, Pete... <br />Take care, and best wishes!!!Kavitahttp://kavisionz.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-68538035131021717852010-12-15T07:38:41.103+00:002010-12-15T07:38:41.103+00:00This is lovely, Pete. I share your melancholia, es...This is lovely, Pete. I share your melancholia, esp after hearing of the refugees run aground on Christmas Island tonight...xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-42371581953803384432010-12-15T07:05:07.483+00:002010-12-15T07:05:07.483+00:00Strong intense digging deep into ones soul speakin...Strong intense digging deep into ones soul speaking ones truth. It is like 'Pluto' is shining a light and bringing up to the surface what lies beneath.<br /><br />deeply moving,<br />joannyjoannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03338150531816845279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-87715976476816214382010-12-15T04:12:43.198+00:002010-12-15T04:12:43.198+00:00I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels th...I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels this way. There's something about this time of year, when winter sets in with a vengeance, that has us casting over our world like hounds looking for a scent of something to keep chasing...you may not think it your best, pete, but it spoke to me. <br />Cheers, (as you always say) <br />~hwhedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-88557811582360734832010-12-15T02:23:33.149+00:002010-12-15T02:23:33.149+00:00Nice, doom-themed work. Made me smile.Nice, doom-themed work. Made me smile.Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1690603320508472274.post-25779188596732396692010-12-15T02:01:26.081+00:002010-12-15T02:01:26.081+00:00There is much deep feeling here. I'm glad that...There is much deep feeling here. I'm glad that it finds its expression in your poetry.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.com